rockymtn
Posts: 1
Joined: 23 Dec 08
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16 Aug 09 4:49 am
Hi Tara,
I'm new here, but I noticed a few things:
1) The header image, while very cute, is huge and on my laptop takes up almost half the screen. It doesn't leave much room to get me to move down the screen.
2) You have no headline to speak of. You need to get me curious - why do I want to toilet train my cat? As Perry Marshall says, when people go to the store to buy a drill, they don't want a drill, they want a hole. Think about that in your headline.
3) If you ask me, get rid of that Adsense block at the top, and let the text of your article flow in there -- get 'em reading. Like I said above, all I see on my laptop is the header, the Adsense, and the product image on the right -- no reason to stay. If you look at Marks example on his WOW Black Book site, there are no Adsense blocks keeping people from clicking his affiliate links.
4. Last and maybe most important, you show me right on the page (assuming I've stayed this long) all the steps to do it! Why do I need to buy the book? You've already told me how.
I hope you won't think I'm picking on you here; I don't mean it that way. Hope this helps you out.
Dallas
